If i hold your door for you
will that change your world for you
if i sweep you off your feet
satisfy your every need
will i be the one you see
or will you be
like the ones that vacation here
share my smokes and my beer
satisfy their need for love
their need for touch
away from home for awhile
where they dont get much
i have your flowers
i have your poems
i have this white horse
that will ride us off
into the sunset
i have a lifetime
of things to say about
your beauty
but not just outside
because if all you
are is beautiful
on the outside
then ill trade
you in a minute
for someone i
can have a
conversation with
just like you
would trade me
after i satisfy
you sexually
for a man with abs
or more money
but im still your
cyrano
i give you romance
in stereo
im that prince
that you seek
im whats missing
in your life
so for evolution
lets start a revolution
and break free
of these vicious circles
you be my Mariah
and ill be your Steve Irkel
and when you need a bad boy
i can play that role
ive seen it done
seen it told
and sold
i only want to see you
smiling
you dont even see
that everything you look
for is right here in me.
the only way youre
ever going to find
a man that has
everything you
want and need
is to create one.
beyond that its
random
like an electrical storm
or when its warm in december
im the man you want to remember
ill sing to you
and write you rhymes
the thing you have to see
is that i feel free to be me
and when you feel free to be you
you will understand what i do
Cool! Had to read it twice to absorb it all!!
ReplyDeletethere is a yearning here, but seems to be the when you wnat me type relationship which hurts...and sucks...nice one shot though...
ReplyDeleteAcute, interrelatable, one that is a more-than-once read - this reminds of how I felt when I met my current girlfriend, though I don't think I stated my wants and intentions so thoroughly or so well. :)
ReplyDeleteGosh a dream for many women - except sometimes the right one doesn't get it.
ReplyDeleteThis is so well crafted with emotion and a purpose
Nice One Shot or double shot my friend
an always appreciative moon
Always amazed with how you weave in references effortlessly. The importance of being understood is expressed with great feeling, a sense of longing pain. Outstanding lines and depth. cheers
ReplyDeleteSuch a modern relationship. Women traveling alone, hooking up, playing the Casanova, and the sensitive native is left somewhat in the dark as to whether she is genuine or just a playa. This couldn't be imagined before the 60s or 70s. And I'm not sure we're genetically wired for it yet. But you did a fabulous job of running the thought pattern of a guy falling for a girl in a tourist town. Thanks for posting, Gay @beachanny
ReplyDeleteSuch creative work. Loved it..
ReplyDeletethe middles makes it
Interesting point of view here, Theron. Too often we've heard the tragic tale of the Other Woman waiting for a man to leave his wife/family to be with her. The Other Man's take is a bit different, yet essentially the same: They've both been left hollow and wanting.
ReplyDeleteAnother nice One Shot!
it touched my soul theron..your heart pours into your words and it reached simply and profound :)
ReplyDeletewow - that was fantastic - so well written - the emotions - the pain - the longing - like the lines...because if all you
ReplyDeleteare is beautiful
on the outside
then ill trade
you in a minute
for someone i
can have a
conversation with
just like you
would trade me ....
Whenever I read your poetry mind mind is overwhelmed with thoghts and images. I makes me want to write and express myself, thank you
ReplyDelete"I'll sing to you
ReplyDeletewrite you rhymes..."
A lot of heart here, in this poem, way to put it out there!
Marvelous rhythm!
ReplyDeleteI so relate to this and have written a piece like this many times. This is a great write. Nice One Shot! Love and Light, Sender
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